"I wonder who's carrot patch this is?" Mr. Rabbit thought to himself.
"I better take advantage of this fortuitous opportunity." he continued.
As he started to hop down and check the patch of carrots out he heard some rustling coming from the bush behind him. He quickly turned around to see a man with a gun coming out of the bush. As soon as the man got out of the bush he pointed his double barrel rifle right at Mr. Rabbit.
"Watcha got der Mr.?" said Mr. Rabbit.
"You best not be messing with my carrot patch wabbit!" Said the hunter.
"What if I is, what you gwinter do bout it?" asked Mr. Rabbit.
"I reckon I got this here gun pointed at you right now." responded the hunter.
"Well you may wanna look behind ya, there's a big fella lommin over ya." said Mr. Rabbit.
"What your talkin bout wabbit?" asked the hunter.
As soon as the hunter turned his head around, Mr Rabbit dashed into the thicket about five feet away from him. In the cover of the thicket, Mr. Rabbit sat there quiet and motionless until he could slip away in the cover of darkness. While Mr. Rabbit had been hiding the night before, he realized that there was a briar patch not but twenty feet away from were he was caught. When the coast was clear, Mr. Rabbit set off for home with a plan on how he could trick the hunter and get some carrots.
When dawn broke the next morning Mr. Rabbit quickly set off for the carrot patch. During the night he had sewn together a toy rabbit that looked like himself. In the same spot he was caught the day before, he set the toy rabbit for the hunter to find. Mr. Rabbit had also tied a long piece of string to one of the legs of the toy rabbit and ran the rest of that string through the briar patch to the place that he was hiding. After a short wait, the hiding Mr. Rabbit saw the hunter approaching the place that the toy rabbit sat.
As soon as the hunter saw what he thought to be Mr. rabbit he started pulling out his gun. Before the hunter could take his shot, Mr. Rabbit started pulling the string so that the toy rabbit moved towards the briar patch. The hunter quickly took off after the toy rabbit thinking that he wasn't going to be fooled again today. In his rage, the hunter failed to notice that the toy rabbit was heading straight for the briar patch.
(Black Burnt Briar Patch: RobertRDavis)
Authors Note: This story was based on the story Mr. Fox Gets into Serious Business. However, I changed the story to make it like one of Mr. Rabbit's usual trickster stories. In the unit of More Brer Rabbit, none of the stories except for Mr. Fox Gets into Serious Business interacts with a human. In the original story, Mr. Rabbit gets caught Mr. Man and then tricks Mr. Fox into switching places with him.
Bibliography:
Story Title: Mr. Fox Gets into Serious Business
Story Author: Joel Chandler Harris
Story Year: 1881
Web Source: Mr. Fox Gets into Serious Business
This was such a fun story! I like you added your own original twist to the plot and using the toy rabbit was quite clever. Your dialogue between the hunter and the rabbit in the beginning was very good and it's funny that the trickster gets his way in the end. I haven't read any of the original stories but I also like that you tried to make the characters talk in the same dialect as the originals.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading this story of yours. Your retelling was very creative and clever, especially since Brer Rabbit is always able to get his way in the end. The way that you highlighted on the trickster aspect of the Brer Rabbit stories is definitely a great way to do your writings, especially since you are so good at it! I look forward to reading more of your work soon! Keep it up
ReplyDeleteI like the feel of this story, it was part children's book and part comedy. It had sort of a Bugs Bunny slash Elmer Fudd characters in it as well. I like how the rabbit was clever enough to devise such a full proof plan to trick the hunter. Not only did he trick the hunter he also got some extra carrots for his kids. Good story!
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ReplyDeleteI really loved your story! I was going to read the Brer Rabbit stories, but I wasn't sure how I would do with the storytelling. However, you did a great job. I really liked the ending with the toy rabbit. I was literally laughing the hunter chased the toy rabbit into the briar patch. Like previous readers, this reminded me a lot of a bugs bunny cartoon. Overall you have done a fabulous job this week.
Your story is very creative seth! I didn't read the Brer Rabbit stories, but I was told that they were good. I looked at some more information on Brer Rabbit and I saw that he is a trickster similar to Anansi the spider. I think your story was very clever, and you still made Brer get what he always wants in the end. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThis story reminds me of the Brer Rabbit log ride at Universal. It is pretty much the same concept where the rabbit leads the bad guys into the briar patch, but for some reason you also follow the rabbit and you end up going down the log flume into the water. I never really understood the story behind that ride, but for some reason that has always been what I have thought of whenever I see a cartoon rabbit (besides Bugs Bunny, of course). Good job on the story.
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