My first thoughts on getting on your introduction page was that you picked great colors! I think the black and white scale you are currently utilizing is great! It is simple but still is really successful at grabbing the attention of your audience. I also like the picture that you put on your introduction page. I think that it goes well with your overall theme of the story and also goes well with your color theme that you picked for your storybook. After reading your introduction post I think that it is so interesting that you decided to place the meeting all the way down in Antarctica! Also what a great idea to do a meeting or gathering to bring all the animals together once each eight years to talk about the things they’ve accomplished! I love your crawfish story! I think it is so original and really keeps to your original ideas! I like that you have been able to keep all of your ideas consistent throughout your whole storybook so far! I was worried that would be something I would not be able to do so I decided to do the portfolio instead! Great job so far and I look forward to reading more of your storybook throughout the semester!
Hello Seth! I love your cover photo, how fitting it is for you topic. It has a slight humorous edge to it that I really like. Now on to your introduction, I like the mood it instantly creates with the first line. It was very welcoming and set a nice tone to the rest of you introduction. Using these stories to explain the creation of Earth is a brilliant idea! I especially like how you summarized everything that these stories will be containing. Everything was explained well and was easy to comprehend. You did well in starting from one location and connecting it with the next location. I just realized that these stories will be told by animals, even better! I guess when I heard that this narrator was called Polar Bear I should’ve known you meant an actual polar bear. I’m looking forward to reading the rest of your story. I’m interested to see how you’ll incorporate animals into this. Will they each have their own individual unique twist on things? Or will humans also be participating in this story time? I guess I’ll have to wait and see then. Once again, great introduction and keep up the good work!
Hello Seth, this is my first time to see your storybook. I will be commenting on your cover page, introduction and your first story. To start off, your cover page is great. The theme that you have chosen is great. Your introduction is great. You lay out what your storybook is going to be able very nicely. You do not tell the reader to much of the story so they are intrigued to keep reading. The pictures are a great touch as well. They help the reader see what you want them to see. Like the river or the area that the Osage came from. The font on your pages is easy to read which is great. Also the contrast between the colors is helpful in reading as well. The beginning to your first story is perfect. The way you wrote it made me laugh. The little crayfish is a bold one. This story is pretty entertaining. I have never heard the story before so I thought it was interesting. A crayfish is so small I could see how many people would doubt that he could create the land. I did notice that your story is about a crawfish but your picture says crayfish. I know they are these two are same but this might confuse some of the other readers. Besides that your storybook looks great.
I actually moved to Pawhuska, part of Osage County, when I was nine and took a Native American History class in high school. However, I actually enjoyed reading this haha. Your introduction was done really well and I like that you are telling it from a bear's perspective. You give a lot of details and information for the upcoming stories without it being overbearing (get it?) or confusing. I think the images you used on the introduction page were really good choices too because it helped set the scene and helped to show where all these tribes are. Your crawfish story is so cute! I love how when he first starts talking the font is really small and then gets really big before reaching a normal size. It definitely puts the reader in the scene. I haven't read any of the stories for the Native American unit yet, but I think you did a great job with this story. I really like your homepage as well. I think the background and the monochromatic scheme was a good choice. I love the image that you used too! I think the fox rowing ties in really well with having animals tell their creation stories.
I love your Storybook theme! My favorite types of stories are the Native American tales. So this week and next week are my favorite units of the class since they consist of Native American units! First of all, that picture of the crayfish is awesome. That made me laugh! He looks like the king of the world! Your story on Lock-Chew was wonderful. I absolutely loved the way you opened the story. The font size with the volume of the crayfish's voice was awesome! I would not have thought of that in a million years! I love the personality you have put into the crayfish. That's one of my favorite aspects of Native American tales. The other is the explanation of a worldly phenomenon, in this case the appearance of land on earth. It's adorable the crayfish realizes that he's very tiny, but that doesn't stop him from doing anything! He created land for heaven's sake! I really want to know who the people that Lock-Chew was stealing land from are. I bet they're creepy. And mysterious. I really want to keep up with your Storybook! Keep up the great work and I look forward to reading more!
Hi Seth. I like the very neutral color scheme you have chosen for your storybook with the light blue as well! It is easy on the eyes and fits perfectly with the images you chose for your background and coverpage. I think the picture on your coverpage does an excellent job of capturing my attention towards your choice of topic because it really empowers the wolf! I love that you chose the introduction to be centered around a festival where the animals can gather together. You did a wonderful job bringing the history and geography into your introduction as well. Your first story started off in a great way! I love the little voice by means of the small text. I could really see that he was super small and the visual image helps too. His description of his little but big strength makes me so happy. I like that you chose this particular story to empower this little creator because it is fun and I agree that the crawfish is very intriguing like your author’s note mentioned. The only suggestion I really have is being careful using the same words repeatedly. It can bog down the story a little bit but overall I think you have an excellent storybook coming along!
Hi Seth, for this week I will be commenting on your story book page as a whole. I will be assessing and analyzing your stories and certain aspects of your page such as images and font used. Initially, when I first clicked you page, I thought that you did an amazing job with the color theme used. I think that it really complements your home screen and your work so far. I like the image of the coyote used on your home page. And I also like the fact that it is a simple black and white sketch. Which goes very well with your background color. I think you have chosen an excellent title, as it makes the reader wonder, what journey are they going to embark on? I also like that a polar bear is talking to your readers. Informing us that we will be going on a trip. It is a very adventurous idea. I like your description of different geographical regions and the brief history lesson you give your readers. It really builds up your story book. I also like that you made the story of the crawfish your own, and it was very helpful that you added more of your own information. I look forward to reading more of your stories.
Seth, first off I thought it was really exciting that I would be getting to read a Native American storybook right after reading through two units of Native American stories. Having that background info would make understanding the context of your storybook easier! I think one of the biggest ideas I took away from the Native American storytelling was how interested they were with nature and how things were created! They had a story for just about how anything and everything came to be. So I think you are spot-on in creating a storybook that deals with animals and nature and has a background and layout to fit that exact theme. Your visuals and pictures are great, and I love that in your intro you used a great deal of pictures to emphasize the different locations and regions!
As for your introduction, I love the use of a narrator, in your case the polar bear, and I love the idea of the Animal Festival. The only suggestion or concern I had was when reading the intro I became a little confused on who you had convinced to come to Antarctica to stay in the tents, etc. Was it the different animals, if so which kinds or what ones, or was it Native American tribes? Other than that, awesome job!!
As for your story, I read Crawfish's Might and I thought the opening of it was so cute!!! What a great idea to play on the size of the crawfish and using a microphone by altering the size of the font!!! I also like that you started out with some great background information about the story including the animal, the situation and the location. Your story is really great overall!! The cute and witty tone of the crawfish really pulls it all together, and it is a really interesting take on how the land came to be. Overall, I think you are doing great on your storybook and cannot wait to read more!!
I really like your introduction page, Seth. I feel like we have a personal greeter that has approached us, given us the rundown on what we will be experiencing with the storytelling, the correlations between the stories and the land, and even pointing out specific speakers to us as they approach the podium. I think this is an excellent way to draw your readers into the storybook. It lets us know what to expect, but also keeps a little from us, thus providing some intrigue. It was also nice to see someone else who used the Native American stories for their storybook.
Moving right along….I LOVE the way you introduced the first speaker. The beginning was exactly that awkward time where the mic is too low, then too loud, and then they get it just right. This was definitely a great way to keep the flow from the introduction moving. I liked your story Crawfish’s Might. I think it’s fascinating how each tribe has their own story about the creation of the Earth. I read the Cherokee unit and their creation story is different. Great stuff.
With Elk’s Rushing Wind, I’m really glad you took the liberty to add in your own details. I agree with you wholeheartedly that bringing the tornadoes into the story to make it more dramatic worked very well. And of course, like you said, since we’re in Oklahoma, it worked perfectly.
This is a great collection of stories, Seth. I really enjoyed your storybook. And again, I’m glad someone else decided to go the Native American route.
Hey Seth. Your storybook is one I must read for the internet assignment this week, and because I have never read your storybook before, I will be commenting on the cover page, introduction, and first story. First, I would like to say that I like the layout and colors of your cover page. I think the gray color and landscape background is very nice and simple. It is pleasing to the eye and not very distracting. Also, I think the picture you added was very cool! I loved reading through your introduction because most people only include one picture, but you included several. It really helps the reader visualize what you are talking about. Also, when I read the word crawfish, you had me hooked. I am from Louisiana (I actually just visited this past weekend) and I LOVE crawfish. So I guess you could say I was pretty excited to read your first story. Also, I have been to Mount Shasta, so I'll have to revisit your storybook to read the story about that! I thought your first story was so interesting. The creation story is different in many cultures but this one is so unique. You wouldn't think a creation story would involve the work of a small little crawfish, but I guess that's what makes the story so great! Very good job on this, and I can't wait to come back to read more!
I really enjoyed reading your storybook! Starting on the home page, I really liked the them you chose for your story book. The subtle grey scale tones give a feeling of something that happened long ago. The grey scale background also makes the color images that you use later in the storybook seem very vibrant and colorful in comparison. Too much color can be a distracting thing in many cases, so I think this subtle use of it really adds a lot to your storybook.
I thought the idea you came up with in the introduction of all the animals coming together and meeting once a year. That's a really creative and fun way of telling this story. I have to say, I can't blame all the other animals for not wanting to have this meeting in Antarctica. That's all fine any dandy when you have a big polar bear coat, but not when all you have is flesh!
In the "Crawfish's Might" his line "hello all…..ummm excuse me….can someone please lower the microphone?!" made me laugh! That would certainly have to be a low microphone for a crawfish. This was a great use of vernacular and dialogue as well.
Thank you for telling me my rhyming story about Jack and Jill was good. I wasn’t really sure about that one. I was not super confident in it, and you helped lift my spirits!
Seth, thanks for taking the time to read my storybook again and leave your comments. You were very helpful in making me realize what kinds of stories people will enjoy reading about when it comes to my odd Rebel-Doctor Who themes. Thank you!
My first thoughts on getting on your introduction page was that you picked great colors! I think the black and white scale you are currently utilizing is great! It is simple but still is really successful at grabbing the attention of your audience. I also like the picture that you put on your introduction page. I think that it goes well with your overall theme of the story and also goes well with your color theme that you picked for your storybook. After reading your introduction post I think that it is so interesting that you decided to place the meeting all the way down in Antarctica! Also what a great idea to do a meeting or gathering to bring all the animals together once each eight years to talk about the things they’ve accomplished! I love your crawfish story! I think it is so original and really keeps to your original ideas! I like that you have been able to keep all of your ideas consistent throughout your whole storybook so far! I was worried that would be something I would not be able to do so I decided to do the portfolio instead! Great job so far and I look forward to reading more of your storybook throughout the semester!
ReplyDeleteHello Seth! I love your cover photo, how fitting it is for you topic. It has a slight humorous edge to it that I really like. Now on to your introduction, I like the mood it instantly creates with the first line. It was very welcoming and set a nice tone to the rest of you introduction. Using these stories to explain the creation of Earth is a brilliant idea! I especially like how you summarized everything that these stories will be containing. Everything was explained well and was easy to comprehend. You did well in starting from one location and connecting it with the next location. I just realized that these stories will be told by animals, even better! I guess when I heard that this narrator was called Polar Bear I should’ve known you meant an actual polar bear. I’m looking forward to reading the rest of your story. I’m interested to see how you’ll incorporate animals into this. Will they each have their own individual unique twist on things? Or will humans also be participating in this story time? I guess I’ll have to wait and see then. Once again, great introduction and keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteHello Seth, this is my first time to see your storybook. I will be commenting on your cover page, introduction and your first story. To start off, your cover page is great. The theme that you have chosen is great. Your introduction is great. You lay out what your storybook is going to be able very nicely. You do not tell the reader to much of the story so they are intrigued to keep reading. The pictures are a great touch as well. They help the reader see what you want them to see. Like the river or the area that the Osage came from. The font on your pages is easy to read which is great. Also the contrast between the colors is helpful in reading as well. The beginning to your first story is perfect. The way you wrote it made me laugh. The little crayfish is a bold one. This story is pretty entertaining. I have never heard the story before so I thought it was interesting. A crayfish is so small I could see how many people would doubt that he could create the land. I did notice that your story is about a crawfish but your picture says crayfish. I know they are these two are same but this might confuse some of the other readers. Besides that your storybook looks great.
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ReplyDeleteI actually moved to Pawhuska, part of Osage County, when I was nine and took a Native American History class in high school. However, I actually enjoyed reading this haha. Your introduction was done really well and I like that you are telling it from a bear's perspective. You give a lot of details and information for the upcoming stories without it being overbearing (get it?) or confusing. I think the images you used on the introduction page were really good choices too because it helped set the scene and helped to show where all these tribes are.
Your crawfish story is so cute! I love how when he first starts talking the font is really small and then gets really big before reaching a normal size. It definitely puts the reader in the scene. I haven't read any of the stories for the Native American unit yet, but I think you did a great job with this story.
I really like your homepage as well. I think the background and the monochromatic scheme was a good choice. I love the image that you used too! I think the fox rowing ties in really well with having animals tell their creation stories.
Great job!
Hey Seth!
ReplyDeleteI love your Storybook theme! My favorite types of stories are the Native American tales. So this week and next week are my favorite units of the class since they consist of Native American units! First of all, that picture of the crayfish is awesome. That made me laugh! He looks like the king of the world! Your story on Lock-Chew was wonderful. I absolutely loved the way you opened the story. The font size with the volume of the crayfish's voice was awesome! I would not have thought of that in a million years! I love the personality you have put into the crayfish. That's one of my favorite aspects of Native American tales. The other is the explanation of a worldly phenomenon, in this case the appearance of land on earth. It's adorable the crayfish realizes that he's very tiny, but that doesn't stop him from doing anything! He created land for heaven's sake! I really want to know who the people that Lock-Chew was stealing land from are. I bet they're creepy. And mysterious. I really want to keep up with your Storybook! Keep up the great work and I look forward to reading more!
Hi Seth. I like the very neutral color scheme you have chosen for your storybook with the light blue as well! It is easy on the eyes and fits perfectly with the images you chose for your background and coverpage. I think the picture on your coverpage does an excellent job of capturing my attention towards your choice of topic because it really empowers the wolf! I love that you chose the introduction to be centered around a festival where the animals can gather together. You did a wonderful job bringing the history and geography into your introduction as well. Your first story started off in a great way! I love the little voice by means of the small text. I could really see that he was super small and the visual image helps too. His description of his little but big strength makes me so happy. I like that you chose this particular story to empower this little creator because it is fun and I agree that the crawfish is very intriguing like your author’s note mentioned. The only suggestion I really have is being careful using the same words repeatedly. It can bog down the story a little bit but overall I think you have an excellent storybook coming along!
ReplyDeleteHi Seth, for this week I will be commenting on your story book page as a whole. I will be assessing and analyzing your stories and certain aspects of your page such as images and font used. Initially, when I first clicked you page, I thought that you did an amazing job with the color theme used. I think that it really complements your home screen and your work so far. I like the image of the coyote used on your home page. And I also like the fact that it is a simple black and white sketch. Which goes very well with your background color.
ReplyDeleteI think you have chosen an excellent title, as it makes the reader wonder, what journey are they going to embark on? I also like that a polar bear is talking to your readers. Informing us that we will be going on a trip. It is a very adventurous idea. I like your description of different geographical regions and the brief history lesson you give your readers. It really builds up your story book. I also like that you made the story of the crawfish your own, and it was very helpful that you added more of your own information. I look forward to reading more of your stories.
Seth, first off I thought it was really exciting that I would be getting to read a Native American storybook right after reading through two units of Native American stories. Having that background info would make understanding the context of your storybook easier! I think one of the biggest ideas I took away from the Native American storytelling was how interested they were with nature and how things were created! They had a story for just about how anything and everything came to be. So I think you are spot-on in creating a storybook that deals with animals and nature and has a background and layout to fit that exact theme. Your visuals and pictures are great, and I love that in your intro you used a great deal of pictures to emphasize the different locations and regions!
ReplyDeleteAs for your introduction, I love the use of a narrator, in your case the polar bear, and I love the idea of the Animal Festival. The only suggestion or concern I had was when reading the intro I became a little confused on who you had convinced to come to Antarctica to stay in the tents, etc. Was it the different animals, if so which kinds or what ones, or was it Native American tribes? Other than that, awesome job!!
As for your story, I read Crawfish's Might and I thought the opening of it was so cute!!! What a great idea to play on the size of the crawfish and using a microphone by altering the size of the font!!! I also like that you started out with some great background information about the story including the animal, the situation and the location. Your story is really great overall!! The cute and witty tone of the crawfish really pulls it all together, and it is a really interesting take on how the land came to be. Overall, I think you are doing great on your storybook and cannot wait to read more!!
I really like your introduction page, Seth. I feel like we have a personal greeter that has approached us, given us the rundown on what we will be experiencing with the storytelling, the correlations between the stories and the land, and even pointing out specific speakers to us as they approach the podium. I think this is an excellent way to draw your readers into the storybook. It lets us know what to expect, but also keeps a little from us, thus providing some intrigue. It was also nice to see someone else who used the Native American stories for their storybook.
ReplyDeleteMoving right along….I LOVE the way you introduced the first speaker. The beginning was exactly that awkward time where the mic is too low, then too loud, and then they get it just right. This was definitely a great way to keep the flow from the introduction moving. I liked your story Crawfish’s Might. I think it’s fascinating how each tribe has their own story about the creation of the Earth. I read the Cherokee unit and their creation story is different. Great stuff.
With Elk’s Rushing Wind, I’m really glad you took the liberty to add in your own details. I agree with you wholeheartedly that bringing the tornadoes into the story to make it more dramatic worked very well. And of course, like you said, since we’re in Oklahoma, it worked perfectly.
This is a great collection of stories, Seth. I really enjoyed your storybook. And again, I’m glad someone else decided to go the Native American route.
Hey Seth. Your storybook is one I must read for the internet assignment this week, and because I have never read your storybook before, I will be commenting on the cover page, introduction, and first story. First, I would like to say that I like the layout and colors of your cover page. I think the gray color and landscape background is very nice and simple. It is pleasing to the eye and not very distracting. Also, I think the picture you added was very cool! I loved reading through your introduction because most people only include one picture, but you included several. It really helps the reader visualize what you are talking about. Also, when I read the word crawfish, you had me hooked. I am from Louisiana (I actually just visited this past weekend) and I LOVE crawfish. So I guess you could say I was pretty excited to read your first story. Also, I have been to Mount Shasta, so I'll have to revisit your storybook to read the story about that! I thought your first story was so interesting. The creation story is different in many cultures but this one is so unique. You wouldn't think a creation story would involve the work of a small little crawfish, but I guess that's what makes the story so great! Very good job on this, and I can't wait to come back to read more!
ReplyDeleteHey Seth!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your storybook! Starting on the home page, I really liked the them you chose for your story book. The subtle grey scale tones give a feeling of something that happened long ago. The grey scale background also makes the color images that you use later in the storybook seem very vibrant and colorful in comparison. Too much color can be a distracting thing in many cases, so I think this subtle use of it really adds a lot to your storybook.
I thought the idea you came up with in the introduction of all the animals coming together and meeting once a year. That's a really creative and fun way of telling this story. I have to say, I can't blame all the other animals for not wanting to have this meeting in Antarctica. That's all fine any dandy when you have a big polar bear coat, but not when all you have is flesh!
In the "Crawfish's Might" his line "hello all…..ummm excuse me….can someone please lower the microphone?!" made me laugh! That would certainly have to be a low microphone for a crawfish. This was a great use of vernacular and dialogue as well.
Thank you for telling me my rhyming story about Jack and Jill was good. I wasn’t really sure about that one. I was not super confident in it, and you helped lift my spirits!
ReplyDeleteSeth, thanks for taking the time to read my storybook again and leave your comments. You were very helpful in making me realize what kinds of stories people will enjoy reading about when it comes to my odd Rebel-Doctor Who themes. Thank you!
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